Haunted Hooters

November 1, 2011 in Poetry, Scary!

Today
it was a Hooters girl
with your smile.

One of the guys says
She looks evil.

Horns reach
for the sky
from the corners
of her lips
and for a moment
I forget
you are lost
to me.

Ni aqui.
Ni aya.
Ni comme ci comme ca.

Her face is long, though
and she teeters off
on legs
like thin clay sticks,
her long black curly hair
sweeping left and right
like curtains in
a pleasant autumn breeze.

Another one
has your angry
crossed arms.
Elbows out hard
trynna cold bone stab
a motherfucker.
She might as well
be leaning
against a car
shaking her head
at me.
She blows up
at wisps of hair
in her face
while she dries
the faux coconut bowls.

This is how
you haunted me
today.

  • http://wordsmoker.com/help/members-3/militantrubberducky/ MilitantRubberDucky

    I, of course, like the idea of cold bone elbows stabbing a (probably deserving) motherfucker. Yay for violence in poetry!

  • http://wordsmoker.com/help/members-3/fictionsinmotion/ Vaquero

    This one time, I went to this place for lunch and I was haunted by every guy I ever dated. *shiver*

    food

  • http://wordsmoker.com/help/members-3/kausaustralisandsaturn/ Worthless Emo

    The energy is carefully crafted in this and was excellent, I thought. Well done.

    I thought Motherfucker was prompt and the haunted closure at the end was ambiguous enough that the poet doesn’t smother the poem–leaves me wondering which parts of the shadow feminine haunt the writer.

    Like a Motherfucker

    <3

  • http://wordsmoker.com/help/members-3/wickedneurons/ wickedneurons

    All her parts haunt me. Just one of those things. I like to keep my poems short. I think the reader gets a sense of hey, this dude is seeing this chick all over the place.

    You should’ve seen the girl drying the dishes, though. She was pretty mad at her boss. That “motherfucker” was almost a “muhfucka”. But I hadn’t gone slangy anywhere else and it felt off. I kept “trynna” because “trying to cold bone stab/ a motherfucker” just wasn’t street enough.

    Thanks for reading and commenting, guys.

  • http://wordsmoker.com/help/members-3/militantrubberducky/ MilitantRubberDucky

    @ wickedneurons:
    I want to be a girl that haunts someone someday. Not sure why.